When the darkness opens up like a tomb
light floods in and I can see
When the fear starts to choke me like a noose
the angels remind me we are safe
When the sadness starts to drench me like rain
my children’s laughter sounds and I smile
The road is long and winding
but the signs glow like beacons
and my heart and spirit are strong
© www.mypastmademe.com 2011
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I have submitted the above for Thursday Poets’ Rally Week 40 hosted by Jingle
I solidly belive that with all my heart
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I can easily build up an image with the sequence of your words! Nice write!
Happy Rally! (:
Thank you and same to you! 🙂
From my gut I must say, Your poem is a beacon of hope! From my mind I must say, wonderful play of balance with a nice slant toward strength through optimism in the end.
Well, I wasn’t sure what to call it, but when I read through it the choice was obvious. Thank you for your positivity. 🙂
I enjoyed the write a lot, splendid! It shows strength and power, resilience and those voices are all your own 🙂
Glad you enjoyed it! To be honest, before being invited to the Rally I hadn’t written anything for a while so this is all very positive and it came to me with such ease, walking along in the sunshine (which lifts everyone, does it not?). 🙂
So well written and deeply layered. Excellent!
JP
http://tasithoughts.wordpress.com/2011/03/28/when-will-i-know/
Your comments mean a lot, thank you 🙂
Very nice, and optimistic piece which is hard to find sometimes.
Yes, I’m proud that finally I am producing work with an uplifting vibe (not that I ever cared about that, I just write what comes) … I see my poetry over the years as being an extension of myself so this is nourishment for the soul, I feel! Thank you 🙂
i hope you stay that way. beautiful rally piece
I hope so too … always learning, always moving forward. Thank you 🙂
for every negative occurence, a positive one balances it 🙂 lovely imagery and thoughts..!
Here’s My Poem For Poets Rally
Exactly! I am still teaching myself positivity … and your poem is one I will revisit often I imagine, as it tells me to do the same! Thank you 🙂
I love this…!
Thank you so much 🙂
wow! I love the comfort and courage in here 🙂
I think it’s amazing when someone sees something in a poem which you didn’t detect yourself. Yes, I think you have actually described the two emotions I was feeling when I wrote it, or at least those which I am to remind myself of when needed! Thank you 🙂
Nicely done – a great visual to read!
Thank you 🙂
You brought tears to my eyes with your words, amazing job and so well done!
Wow! It means a lot to me that my words sparked real emotion. Thank you so much 🙂
stunning imagery,
love the whole piece.
cheers.
Happy Rally.
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Thank you so much, and thank you for inviting me in the first place. It sure is a wonderful community, full of encouragement and support! 🙂
Why can everyone write positive poems except me? Really like this one 😀
Thank you. Very rarely have I been able to write anything uplifting or positive, although I’m finding that it’s coming to me easier these days. Take heart … I think some of the best poems are written from pain and anguish; it is probably your strength, but this is only something you will know when you have accomplished what you say you’re unable to do and then you will have succeeded regardless. 🙂